I had some short stories, poems and photographs to share ... and so here I am

A Pause For A Poem

 

talking sideways

no, really, we could’ve,
heck, I just don’t feel,
I just ought to, needy?
I’ll tell you what, um,
no, nothing, not crying

if only I’d not been so,
you know, like it isn’t,
ahem, you know, bizarre,
right, caution to wind,
only, tossed right back

that’s cool, I ought to,
aha, absolutely, I see,
it’s just, um, unclear,
talking sideways? maybe,
yep, I get it, I’m gone



© Copyright, 2006. Shameless Words.

16 comments:

Anonymous said...

I like that poem! It captures the one-sided conversation very well.
I also enjoyed the Mont Blanc photos and post; what an amazing mountain - so singular with such a lot of wide-open land that the mountain surveys.
When I read your review of Time Traveller's Wife I thought Yay! Because I don't think it's as brilliant a book as everyone else thinks either ... like you, I was a little disappointed overall and irritated by the style.

Shameless said...

Hey there CB,
Thanks for your visit and comment. Very much appreciated. :)

If winter has finally arrived here, does that mean summer has arrived back home?

moontopples said...

Shameless: I absolutely love this one.

Shameless said...

Hey Moon,
Thanks! I'm always intrigued by how these conversations sound at one end. :)

Anonymous said...

Potent, very potent. I felt the pain behind the words, and the attack in the constant interruptions.

Very well done.

Anonymous said...

...tossed right back

Yes, that's how it often is.
Wistfulness spun from a slight regret.

Anonymous said...

Cool poem. Worked well.

But what's with the photo? Where's the fur, the pointy ears, the whiskers?

We know, y'know ...

Shameless said...

Jason,
Cheers. Yes, those interruptions.

Susan,
And then we need to throw it out again and again ... :)


and Debi,
You're right. You can see right through me. But one is trying to maintain the illusion ... and as long as there are humans willing to cover for us! :)

Minx said...

Yes, liked this - clever aspect that makes you think of all those one sided conversations that happen all day long! Well, they do in my house anyway!

Shameless said...

I've just taken the plunge and switched to the beta version of blogger. I hope it wasn't a mistake. I notice, for example, that some of the above comments from people I know have been transformed into "anonymous" - before they were identified by the authors' names.
I also lost some of the stuff in my original "model", and had to go back and rejig everything.
Any other gremlins that I should know about? Will I have big regrets? I'm also keen to add a new sidebar to the left; how can i do that? Anyone have any ideas?

Atyllah said...

This is brilliant! It works really well, such a clever rendering of that one-sided conversation.

Can't help with blogger questions except to say that in general blogger seems to have behaved strangely and badly since I switched to the new version.

Shameless said...

Thanks for your kind words, Atyllah.

And my fingers are crossed re blogger beta!

Shameless said...

I hope the new fonts and layout work!! Yikes! :)

Let me know if there are any problems.

Cailleach said...

Nice rendering of one side of the conversation. I was just thinking about that the other day - how bizarre one side of a conversation might be to someone else listening in.

What's going on here? Everything's changed. I like the cool pictures though, very striking.

Shameless said...

Cailleach,

Hi. I appreciate your nice comments on the poem. A workmate said she had a very similar conversation with her American lover the other week, and thinks it's spooky that I posted this!!

Re the changes. I thought it was high time that I put a new coat of paint around the place. A year with the same layout was a bit dreary, no? Does it look OK though? Easy on the eye? I suppose we'll get used to it. Change is always hard. :)

I also found it tedious to have all my posts slugged with the news that it was me who posted them, with the exact time of the transaction. I'm glad I was given the tools to delete those extra bits we don't want!

Cailleach said...

I'm getting used to it - nice changes and the font you're using now is easy on the eye too. :)